《Ortus》Looking for feedback
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Hello!
I'm always looking to improve my writing and have recently received some in-depth and spot on feedback about what could be improved so I'd greatly appreciate if you could leave a comment regarding your thoughts on Ortus.
It doesn't have to be very deep. Just maybe pointing out what things you like, what things you don't like, and maybe something you think I could improve on.
For example: I like the pace of levelling but feel the character interactions and relationships a bit underdeveloped.
Something simple like that is invaluable.
Just leave a comment on this chapter; it doesn't even have to be a review.
Chapter 53 will be posted in 15 minutes! :)
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