《Hold the line.》NOT A CHAPTER- Just an info-dump.
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I went throught and revamped the first block of chapters today, nothing world changing. Nothing worth re-reading unless you are interested in voicing an opinion on whether it feels smoother or not.
Most of what I did is fix capitalization, added/modified some sentence's to try and give the people a more human feel and not vocal information banks.
I also went through and fixed the SYSTEM message boxes thanks to a suggestion from Butterz, which actually led me into fixing the same missing pieces and addign a few more. starting tomorrow I will be trying to put a chapter in once every 2-3 days. that is a conservative estimate since I'll be starting class again tuesday and I dont know exactly what my homework situation is going to look like
I could probably churn them out on a daily basis, and I've got a few chapters planned out in my head and started on paper but if I take the time to write them, set them aside for a bit and come back fresh I can get a solid edit before they drop and I think it will be more efficient and better all around.
We will return to our regularly scheduled post's tomorrow.
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Since this is my first full author post I'm going to add in here that I'm going to try my hardest to keep the MC from going full OP, I love reading OP stories, but I get frustrated when the MC all of a sudden becomes either too hesitant, or too stupid to use their gained powers.
I want our MC to come off as a mercenary. Mercs dont forget, and they never waste an advantage so growth will be slow, and those of you that read a bit further into the leveling system of the first chapter are going to catch that I've already built in what I am refering to as my 'fail-safe' if I get to that point before I'm ready.
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The SYSTEM screens are probably going to be sparse most of the time, I'll have some chapters that will be catch-ups on them, the next for example is going to bring out the rewards, I need to 'build' the system shop, and there are a few skills/magic to be learned. I 'm going for more of a semi-hard litRPG (Be prewarned, I may be 30, but I am a child. If I see a genital joke I'm going to jump on that like paris hilton at an all you can suck dick buffet)
So I will have stats that need to be kept, and I'm all up on how to use excel, but they are not what I want to push my story forward.
I guess I've got that out of my sytem
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