《Battle Maiden》A chicken at the Stake (Q&A, Critique, feedbacks)
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Drawn on Nov 28th 2013. Rough sketch of Sera and Spoon
I really think I should made this thread much sooner. Better late than never I guess.
This is where you can post suggestions, critique etc as you see fit. I know there is much room for improvements (especially grammars, my PRs always pointed that out), having the readers opinion will definitely help me out.
If you see me in the chat, you can also give some feedback there.
Thanks for reading.
Begin here. Prologue.
For Chicken madness
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