《Bloody New World》Suggestions, criticisms and feedback
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This thread is for anyone that would like to inform me about any suggestions/ criticisms and any other feedback you guys may have. I will be checking this post regularly.
I hope I can improve with your help! :)
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The Hidden Myth of Ji Dara
They say Karma [Payback] is a bitch, but could they be any more wrong? This is because according to this book, Karma [Payback], came as a 6 feet tall, golden skinned, devilishly handsome guy… thus, what would we call Karma in this case?Thus is the life of Ji Dara who initially thought that, according to all these cliché novels, that; our earthly civilization is way much better than that of the cultivation world…But, who was he kidding? Who in their right mind would believe that people who could flip entire mountains and boil entire seas and oceans would have a mediocre mindset or old school way of thinking compared to modern day earth who relies on machines to do the fighting for them…Moreover, that is not even considering the fact that the strongest weapon on earth at the moment can’t even dry up the Mississippi…Thus, Ji Dara is not here to speak or live according to these mundane mindsets, rather, he is here to tell everyone the difference between that mediocre mindset of earthly beings and the true reality of what it means to live in a cultivation world where beings tame dragons like they were dogs and phoenixes like they were docile cats…That’s enough… if you wanna find out about the rest, read the novel itself and be very open minded and dynamic, or else, you might end up forgetting what is real and what is fantasy.***1 = This is a book that will appeal to your emotional intelligence, because as the author of this book, i want all my readers to grow so much emotional attachment to this book that I will get responses full of rage, joy, bliss, disappointments and also dedication of my readers, thus, it is going to be a MASTERPIECE…2 = There are going to be many street-smart quotes and actions within it, thus, if you are a hustler who is looking to be successful in life, look out for these hidden tips and secrets that are present in this novel… They are heavy secrets about the society that you will fear of tapping into its benefits…
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The Immortal Dragon And Dragon Girl
Im on an adventure! To find some treasure and glory But what is this A Dragon on my path What should i do? Lets find out! My little sister made the cover art! THANKS A TON Hey! This story has a speciall place in my heart. It's been my way of "learning" to like writing. It's not perfect, but if you want a story with a lot of charm and personality, this is it! Thanks for giving it a chance :D
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Emperor NPC
The Demon Emperor had taken one billion lives and conquered the realms of elves, dwarfs, and giants. When the final realm of man fell to his armies, the stage was set for their world’s finale. A spire of brilliant light pierced the sky, and as the land was torn asunder, the demon emperor met his death. It was not by the hands of a hero, or goddess’ champion, but by a system developer—a creator of the VRMMO Ark World—masquerading as a god! “It’s ironic that it would be you,” said a voice in the black void of the quantum system. “Strange, that you’ve given me this quest, and stranger that I can’t do it without you.” By the power of the thirteenth system developer, the “goddess” Amarytha, the demon emperor was reborn in a new video game where his character never came to be. In the Ark World Sandbox, humans rule as gods over nations of NPCs. Through mastery of their administration commands, they hold absolute control. Only the demon emperor, liberated by the Player System, can challenge them. A crusade begins with one step. Freedom from humanity begins here! ---------------- I'm going to be upfront here. This is not an anti-hero story. So, if you've come for anti-hero you might not enjoy it. The cover art I commissioned from my friend @cyborgraptor. You can find her on twitter, or tumblr. Absolutely awesome person, and way too humble. She's also a great dps on WoW, and her and I always fought for top of the meters. I update every day, or nearly every day. I'll be updating this quickly as I bring it to parity with my other sites. Afterwards, expect 6 or 7 chapters a week. This is my only job and I approach it professionally.
8 376 - In Serial69 Chapters
The Spider's Lair (Vomit Draft)
A group calling themselves ‘The Starlight Spear’ ventures into a dungeon known as ‘The Spider’s Lair’ in the hopes to recover the treasure it possesses. Along with their newest member Morana, what could possibly go wrong? This 'Novella' -ha Novel* will follow the stories of a few main characters centering around a coherent plot. Theo Wood is an elf who joins a new criminal guild in the city of Leeside known as the 'Webbed Children', Sabrina Black is a young orphan girl developing strange new abilities, and Saurus, a Lord Commander put in charge for the recapture of Wetbrook--a town consumed by giant spiders! There will also be some interludes surrounding supporting characters. I'm using Royal Road to publish my first drafts, like throwing paint 'or shit' at a canvas to see what sticks. The writing quality will be the main focus in draft two (You've been warned), and I'm using the first draft mainly as a loose outline for the plot. I will also try and 'show, not tell' in draft two. This is my first attempt at a novel! Any help or advice is much appreciated! If you want to support me! Please follow, rate and comment, as this really helps me understand what to focus on in draft two. Thank you.
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Brujas de la Noche
***Spanish Edition*** Pocos lo saben, pero, debajo de nuestras ciudades, en medio de los bosques y montañas y hasta bajo el océano, hay otro mundo, un mundo lleno de magia, lugares fantásticos y criaturas mitológicas e imaginarias. Por casualidad, me enteré de él, y mi curiosidad me llevó a explorarlo. Hoy, me arrepiento de no haberme controlado, de no haber ignorado ese conocimiento y continuado con mi vida normal. Porque, aunque haya visto cosas increíbles más allá de la imaginación de la mayoría de las personas, conocí también a las Brujas de la Noche y las terribles verdades sobre la condición humana y el lugar de la humanidad en el universo que trajeron con ellas. ¿Cómo volver a una vida normal después de todo lo que vi? No sé si es posible, pero este relato es un intento de paliar los terribles efectos de este conocimiento, un primer paso en dirección a la normalidad. Tal vez compartir todo lo que descubrí, la simple idea de que este conocimiento no es sólo mío, me pueda ayudar.
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Family Comes First
Juliet's parents died when she was young and she never got to experience having a family. She lived a miserable and lonely life. One night at work, she meets a strange man that says he's a reporter and he asks her a few questions. Later that night, the reporter offers to drive her home from work. When Juliet refuses, he kidnaps her and brings her home to be a wife for his oldest son. Juliet slowly loses her sanity as she finally gets a family.
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