《The Last King》Announcement
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My last update was like more than two or three weeks ago. I have had my reasons, but i should have somehow let you guys know about the situation. At first, it was because a storm made the power to the town shut off. Several days without power. My phone, which i was writing the next few chapters on, got reset accidentally by my 5yo nephew who tried to get into it. Which would be okay, i but the app i used to write had to be reinstalled and i couldnt get what i wrote back. i grew depressed.
but i remebered most. then my phone died. That all took a bout a week. However, the internet got shut off for like three days after the power came back on. Then my hand got a bit injured since i had it by a door frame and my little cousins smacked the door on it. No worries, my hand is fine. No broken bones, thank god. Hurts like a bitch even now though. Well, i can still use it to type all this. So its alright really. It's healing.
Now, i have some announcements. kind of. i will in the future move these chapters to that one site i mentioned in my last chapter. i havejust been putting it off. I will put my second story there first, once i edit al the chapters a bit more. Which i have only done a bit of. Im lazy af. i will probably just do it all today or tomorrow in one go, though. All of the second story, not this one. This one too long.
Important: So, i got a new review, i noticed. I saw it a long time ago, only like a day or two after i posted my last chapter. I still had power in my house back then. Anyway, in the review it mentioned the love Roland suddenly seeems to have for Morrigan after they have sex. Like he was a whore. my first reaction was confuse before I realized something. Realized why that reader probably found it outrageous.
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Let me be clear: I dont know exactly when he made the review but it must have been sometime before I had made my edits of that chapter. See, I had already thought of that problem, Roland saying he loved her. I had already been aware of the strangeness that would come with him suddenly saying or thinking that. And i had a explanation for it. But i had forgot to include it. And I realized that not long after the post, maybe a day or half a day after. It must have been at least a full day before I realized that I forgot to put the explanation in though, i think.
I ask that you go back to the chapter and read near the end again. I explained why he would say he loved Morrigan, the rationale behind it. Because he didn't think that without reason. I had no idea i left the reasons out when i posed it. I have edited the explanation in so please go back and read it.
He also made more points, like Grace's lack of maturity befitting her age, how she seems too childish. That point i think was actually already explained? Also, another point was that a girl could fall out of the sky and Roland would probably just do her. I found that one kinda amusing since that essentially did happen with Mercury and yet he didnt do anything. Well, he isnt a stranger to one night stands so that might have actually happened if they were alone and he didn't have Morrigan or Grace to think of.
As for the over-dramatization bit that was said...hm. Maybe that isn't unreasonable. That's not a character problem though, but my own fault. I like drama. And i can write a a LOT of words that emphasises any little bit of drama. I personally think im good at stretching small things into long-ass things. I dont think that is something to be proud of though...
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Oh! And he said something about curve this and curves that...i have to admit, i think this is reasonable too. I think i used to be better at character descriptions, before i actually made the story. But it's like i just concentrate on the physical aspects more, when i should be more...metaphorical? poetic? something along those lines...anyway, i will work on that.
I dont want to devolve my writing so much that i end up just saying " she had large tits" or something like, " his muscles were huge."
So, i need to do character descriptions better. When i look again, i do see that his real problem seems to be the characters since that rating is the lowest. I know that cant just be from lack of proper description of characers. Again, understandable since i have not focused on character dialogue or interactions much at all until more recently.
But I can swear i used to be a lot better in the regard of actual character descriptions. Maybe it's because i dont read much novels that have decent character descriptions now. My writing is easily influenced like that sometimes.
Except in thins case the "picture"is actually dialogue.
shit, though. i want to write more of my other story since i enjoyed writing it. I might do that later. Been saying i would write more of it, but never do. Maybe because im both lazy and feel obligated to focus primarily on this one. Still, i plan to continue both this one and the other. i plan to finish them. probably wont happen for a long time though. i feel both might end up pretty long. maybe the second story especially.
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