《Battlefront》need feedback
Advertisement
Hello readers. Before i proceed any further, i want to know how coherent is my story telling? Does it have any semblance to an organized story? Do you think i am missing the fundamental background building?
Though i did ask this question previously and did get feedback(I am happy for the advice) it is still not enough.
So Please! Tell me what you think.
Even if you completely bash the story i am fine with it.
Give me your feedback.
It will be much appreciated.
Advertisement
- In Serial22 Chapters
Throne Of Origin
To save the universe from doom, an Immortal breaks the fabric of reality and sends his memories back in the past, into the head of a young boy named Damien. However, those memories held power: the knowledge of the future. How could the mind of a young boy comprehend it all? The memories seal themselves in the deepest part of the child's conscience. An unwitting child now possesses the knowledge that no one should ever have, and the only thing stopping him is the question of him understanding it. This fiction is now available on WebNovels too. Although we plan to be a few chapters ahead on RoyalRoad. WebNovel: Throne OF Origin
8 131 - In Serial8 Chapters
Hugh Johnson and the Seven Evil Alts
[participant in the Royal Road Writathon challenge] Hugh Johnson was having a bad day. First there was the stupid long line to get into Comiket, then Truck-kun smashed him into paste, a lolii-goddess who punched him into another world, and finally, a wolf that decided to snack on him. And that was just the last 15 minutes. Now he needs to save Eternasy from the Seven Evil Alternate characters he created while playing Endless Fantasy before they destroy the world. Who knew that your actions in a game would have real-world consequences? Join Hugh as he takes on his first Evil Alt and journeys to the Lair of Daemon Wyrm. Hugh Johnson and the Seven Evil Alts will contain tropes familiar to readers of Japanese isekai light novels - a humorous progression fantasy with slice of life scenes, cute girls, burley men, dungeons, magic, and mayhem. Be warned that the MC is not a clueless weeb who has no idea how women or the world works. Expect this to read like hot garbage, and you will not be disappointed. I never expected to toss it into the Writeathon, but I have poor impulse control, so here we are.
8 197 - In Serial24 Chapters
Dungeon Tower Babel
This is a short story about a naive and inexperienced boy. A boy who thinks he is a man already and decides to test his luck in a dungeon full of bounty. Bounty in a shape of monsters, minerals and other resources. The things get tough and he meets a mysterious girl. Someone, he had never seen anyone like her before. The unusual meeting leads to an unusual relationship and his adventures continue. His goal is to form a party and reach the bottom of The Dungeon Tower Babel.About the fiction:The main protagonist is not OP. He is just average everyday guy so he will make a lot of mistakes and poor desitions.There will be some GameLit elements like [Skills] and [Monsters] but they will be very light.Some teenage drama can be expected but I will try not to overdo it.This is a short novel so expect around 50k words and ~2k words per chapter, (4-5 chapters a week).
8 101 - In Serial25 Chapters
Inside Access
MCRC Story 3: Hot on the trail of his enemies, Jack and Mr. Ozera must work together to help Warren find who the traitor inside of MCRC is. However, having failed at his task before has really hurt Warren and he finds it hard to focus especially around the beautiful Brooklyn who is his cover as he runs around with Mr. Ozera to try and find who, among them, killed so many innocents.
8 214 - In Serial10 Chapters
My First Love. ( Pucca x Garu )
Garu, now in his late teens is mostly known as a strong, hard-working and honourable man.Though, many things have changed throughout the past 6 years- puberty has hit him hard and he's far more famous with ladies than before.But he takes no interest in them all; but one.-10/5/19
8 91 - In Serial81 Chapters
Teenage Advice
Ok, I am starting this advice book to help teenagers with their problems. Here's what you have to do to get advice:1.) Comment a question 2.) Give your name or what you would like to be addressed by3.) Before sending in a comment or message read over it to make sure there aren't any errors
8 211
Prev Chap
Next Chap
Chap List
Boy
Girl
