《Clean Slate》Not a chapter - Just thinking aloud
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Originally I wrote Slate trying to rescue the hostages because he was a good guy, and there was no "quest" involved. I don't know why, but I decided to add it in the last minute, and looking at it now, I agree it doesn't quite fit the theme.
On that note, the reason why I changed it was because this little story of mine is obviously lacking. I needed to make something more interesting about my MC, or have some sort of goal for him to accomplish earlier in the story, but I couldn't think of any way to work something else in. Obviously this is off the wall fiction that I've decided to write after becoming addicted to reading the LITRPG stories on this site, but I wanted it to seem a little more "real". I wanted my MC to have to struggle, without gaining any outright overpowered skills in the beginning, but along the way I failed to make him stand out.
I’ve recognized that for a while now, and I've been struggling with the direction I should go with it. My attempt to make things immediately more interesting failed quite spectacularly from the comments. Thanks for your all guy’s opinions, it’s helping me see where I should improve.
So, I’m going to edit out his quest, and make him storm the fortress because he’s a good guy. I’ll repost it in a few days and return to future content. The change won’t be significant enough for a re-read, but if you want to feel free to comment on if you like the changes.
I’ve still got a few more chapters written, but they are unedited. Proof-reading is a bitch, and is the slowest part of writing to me. Anyways, Thanks for sticking with me, and as always let me know if you have any ideas or comments on how to improve.
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