《Heart of the Dungeon》Edited Chapters. Ch.1 and 3. 07/08/15
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Don’t read this unless you are at the latest chapter. There might be some spoilers further down. Dates are in DD/MM/YY.
Sometimes, when I don’t feel like writing anything new, I might go back to an older chapter and change some of the things that have been bothering me. Quality of life improvements, you know. It probably won’t be big enough to make it a ‘must read’, so if you don’t feel like re-reading an old chapter, you don’t need to. However, the chapters are quite short, specifically, to make them easier to read.
I will list the major changes here. I may feel like returning to a chapter more than once. The title will have the latest changed chapter, if I work on a chapter twice in a row, it will be marked with a ‘part 2’, ‘updated’, the date or something like that.
Chapter 1:
Spoiler :
07/08/15: About 300 words longer, and a few smaller changes all over the chapter.
30/10/15: About 200 words longer, I think. Just more minor changes, implementing a few things I have learnt since I did the last edit.
Chapter 2:
Spoiler :
30/10/15: Just a few minor changes and grammar corrections. Nothing big. All grades and so on are the same.
Chapter 3:
Spoiler :
07/08/15: About 500 words longer. Expanded bug sucker part and bug controlling part and some other small things.
30/10/15: Another 200 words added. Just minor stuff.
Chapter 4:
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30/10/15: About 100 more words. Nothing big, mainly rewording things.
Chapter 5:
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31/10/15: About 600 more words. Mainly rewording things and small additions.
Chapter 6:
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31/10/15: About 300 more words. Mainly rewording things and small additions.
Chapter 7:
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01/11/15: About 800 more words. Mainly rewording things and small additions. Added the concept of the imp using the Heart's mana for his spell.
Chapter 8:
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01/11/15: About 200 more words. Mainly rewording things and small additions.
Chapter 9:
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02/11/15: About 700 more words. Mainly rewording things and small additions. Added a cameo from The Swarm.
Chapter 10:
Spoiler :
02/11/15: About 100 more words. Mainly rewording things and small additions.
Chapter 11:
Spoiler :
02/11/15: About 600 more words. Mainly rewording things and small additions.
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