《My Hermit Life》Criticism
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This is not a Chapter. I am making this post in hopes that all people who have read a majority of my book weill leave s comment on this post giving ideas/ suggestions/ criticisms on how my story can be improved. So any of you great people who plan to continue reading my novel. If you somehow have no suggestions then feel free to ask questions about the story if you would like. To anybody who hasnt read my story please read it before commenting, thank you.
Have a great Day from, WaterBear06
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Amber Silverblood: Silverpack
It has been a month since Amber joined the Silverpack, leaving the ruins of her old pack behind. Now she lives in her alpha's cabin with her mother and the orphaned Kimberly. But just as life is starting to feel normal again, the demonic crime lord Hendricks returns. He has a score to settle with Amber, and he doesn't care who gets hurt in the process. As if that wasn't enough, Majestic is still running experiments on Silverbloods, and Amber's freedom will only last until their current specimen dies. Amber's new pack is being threatened from without and within, and she's going to have to find new strength if she wants to keep it from being torn apart like her last one. New strength... and maybe something else.
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The Fall of Almadel
That fall, the classroom of Master Jeremiah and part of the attaching corridor was cast into hell.— Extract from "The History of Almadel" vol 2. A class of sixth-form students are thrown into a life-or-death struggle in an unfamiliar world. Can they survive and return home, or will they be stuck there forever, opening the door for evil to complete its spread across Britain.
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"There is no Good and Evil. Only Power." Because of an incident when he was ten years old, Kagami Ken had to suffer through excruciating pain due to a one-of-a-kind illness. After a particularly bad fit when he was twenty-three, Kagami Ken fell into a coma for six months! Upon awakening, Ken's intuition told him that his days were numbered, so he sets about doing things that he'd always wanted to do, but never could. Due to a sudden desire to do some good, Ken pours an extraordinary amount of money into a donation to a Charity organization he stumbles upon. He never knew that because of this, He would get the attention of a certain God! After this and that, he now finds himself reincarnated as Reivan Aizenwald, the Half-human, Half-Warbeast baby! On his second lease at life, how will he choose to live? What goals will he aspire to achieve? What Chaos will he bring to this new world!? Find out by reading the story, cuz I honestly don't know! [This story is quite a slow burner, especially since 200+ pages are dedicated to his life before getting reincarnated.] [Chapter Length: 2500-3500 words (It can only be more, never less. Except for bonus/extra or interlude Chapters)] [Chapter Release: Once Every Sunday. Depending on certain factors, like story-pacing, I may post more.] [The Warning tags are just there to give me freedom when writing. I don't plan to be overly descriptive of schmex scenes and gore. Don't worry.] Hello! I'm Lire, and this is my first fiction! I know its going to be rough around the edges. But I'm trying my best to improve day by day. I hope you're patient with me if you do give this fiction a try! Correction suggestions are appreciated. Same with grammar corrections. English isn't my first language, so it would help me improve. I'll try my best to make as few mistakes as possible though! Constructive Criticism is very welcome. Anything to make my first brain-child, the best it can possibly be!! If all you do is diss it, without providing anything constructive, I'm ready to pour whatever creative juices I have on making up insults for you, your mother, and all your Ancestors! ...as long as I don't feel particularly lazy at the time. Also, if your diss makes me laugh while also being true, you get a pass too. I'll even give you rep. By the way, this work will be heavily influenced by (English TLed) Japanese Light Novels and Korean Web Novels. I mainly read that kinda stuff after all. With minor influence from Wuxia and Xianxia. Really, just a little though. Oh, and Harry Potter which I read repeatedly when I was a child. If you hate those types of novels, then please piss off immediately. I don't want to waste your time. Now, If you do like them, then please give my novel a shot! *bows*
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The world you live in is dying.Every breath you take is accounted for.The end is inevitable.Humanity reached the last stage of evolution and struggles with time in technology advancement while they dived head-long towards their fated end.The birth of certain "someone" lit-up the hopes of mankind.At the age of four Lin became the symbol of "Hope" and prayers for salvation to descend upon humanity through his hands were finally answered.Yet it takes his life in exchange.While he expected it to be the eventful end dear Lin didn't know he was completely wrong.Follow Lin as he explores a different world filled with everything that shouldn't exist.
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We all know about the ocular jujutsu called six eyes, also called "Rikugan", eyes said to be sent by God. Unique... but what if there was something that was the exact opposite, something more cursed.
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