《Building An Army In Another World With My Smartphone》CHANGES!
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So I am finally back from revising and exams. Thank god for that!
For the past week or so, I have been changing my story, particularly things that I thought were a good idea at first but then regretted.
This does change the story a bit; however, it's nothing too significant. You can reread everything or just read the rest of this as I have written everything that I have changed.
1) A New System
At first, the MC had a system that would give him special rewards and increases his troop limit. That system was a bit tedious to write and hard to keep track of how many troops he had created so far.
Furthermore, I watched a Youtube Video about Star wars clone troopers and how big the Grand Army of the Republic army was, which made me realise that the MC does not have a big enough army.
So to fix this, he now has a levelling system. Of course, he starts at level one, and at the end of chapter 27, it is at level 20. When a unit kills monsters, he gains XP, but I decided killing humans would not give him any. Well, I say "I decided", but really I just flipped a coin :) It also made tallying how many soldiers the MC has easier.
2) No More Resource Crystals
Not that there was much of it. At first, I thought it was an excellent idea, but then I decided to trash it. The power to be able to make any material was OP, but it didn't line up with his army building powers, hence why I removed it.
3) Quantity issues
At first, the rebel army had two hundred thousand, but that was too many for a rebellion. So I made it smaller by downsizing it to a hundred thousand. It was going to be smaller, but not everyone was trained soldiers in rebellions. So I wanted to include a large number of civilians who chose to stand with the rebels.
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4) Smaller changes
Some weapons have changed, for example, the main gun was the HK33, but after someone had updated its Wiki page, I realised it was made in 1968. The 'new' weapon I decided to use was the FN FAL; I rolled a wheel which had rifles that I thought would be suitable, like the AK or the AR15.
More tanks, More bombers, More Destruction! I think that sentence alone should tell you what changed.
Also, I changed the Dragon bone to Dragon Fang instead.
To be honest, I might have missed some things, but that's just me being silly and not writing down all the changes I have made. If you do reread and notice something has changed, but I did not write it here, feel free to let me know.
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