《Elysium》Update Thread: Concerning Chapter 12 (SPOILER!)
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First I will answer some question and problems that surfaced after chapter 12.
It was NOT Hyrion's fault that the beast attacked the village. He couldn't know about the teleportation magic. Life as a slave is for proud people like the Villagers worse than death.
AND TO 100% I won't make anyone rape little children. Abuse can be understood in many ways, it can be physical beatings and verbal abuse that influences the psyche. I called the fatso pedo guy because a commentator called him pedo guy, I just hadn't the nerve to correct it and went with the flow because I never would have expected such a negative response.
Why take his arm? (I haven't seen this question come up but I think some of you might wonder.)
For those of you that read 'The Alchemist', can only recommend it, then you know... (SPOILER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!)
That Alvin lost his arm because he got to op. My MC is still a child and he is most definetly to op and I didn't want to rewrite the fighting scenes and stuff, so I made him a cripple. The issue won't be solved in just a handful of chapters, but... MAGIC, is all I say!
I hope you guys don't hate me to much for what I did in chapter 12 but I just had to put a bit of spice into my story!
See ya next chapter! :D
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