《All World Online》Prologue: A New Beginning From the End (Unfixed Dialogue)
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Hello, your author here. I guess this is the first chapter for this story. Unfortunately, not the most exciting chapter but does give an idea of my writing style and how things will work out for the rest of the story. Currently:
"....." = dialogue
*....*= actions
Italics = thoughts/ideas
=game info
Things might change, but currently that's how things will be. I also added names besides the dialogue so that you guys have a better idea of who is talking and etc. Iam hoping to get out the first real chapter in a couple of days, I normally brainstorm, but I was really focused on the lore of the story and how to balance out the characters so I didn't really think of the prologue which is why it took me so long to write it.
In addition; my story will contain swearing but it will definitely not be excessive and there will be no extreme sexual content and if there is, I'll be sure to warn you. Also I don't think it's gonna have that much gore so no worries there. I think that's it so far? Please continue to give me suggestions on creatures he will tame and etc, just the few suggestion given to me have been helpful, and the more info the better :). Also feel free to give me suggestions on how to improve my writing style, grammar and etc. Iam a relatively new writer, so be gentle please.
Also if you notice any mistake, be sure to post it so that I can fix it..
Enjoy :)
Edit: Got the boxes going, yay.
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Waking up, Damien felt a throbbing pain emerging from his frontal lobe, and any attempts to remember what had happened were pushed away by the intense headache. After a few seconds of trying to recollect what had happened, but failing to do so, he attempted to get up, only to remain lying down. However, it was not that he did not get up, but rather he couldn’t. At first he was deeply confused, but as each attempt to get his body to respond resulted in failure, his confusion quickly grew into anger and despair. He was angry that his body was refusing to listen to his commands, but his worries quickly overwhelmed his anger, as the idea of never being able to move his body again emerged in his head. He found himself trying every method to get his body to respond, this time with a renewed motivation fueled by his fear of never being able to get up. However, his attention was quickly redirected as he heard the door creak open.
(???) “Damien….”
Although he could not turn his head around to see who had opened the door, he immediately knew. How could he forget the voice of his own mother?
(MC) “Mother?”
However, before he could continue, his mother quickly ran over to the bed and starting sobbing.
(Mrs. Close) “Huk huk huk, how could this happen to my child?! “
Despite his ever growing curiosity of how this situation came to be, he could not find the right moment to ask. He just laid there, listening to his mother's quiet sobbing.
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Eventually his mother had stopped crying, giving him a chance to ask.
(MC) “What happened?”
(Mrs. Close) “Sweetie, you-“
However, before his mother could finish, a second voice interrupted her.
(???) “I think it is better if I explain Mrs. Close”
A man in his mid 40’s came into his view, although Damien had never seen this man before, it was obvious from his attire that the man was a doctor.
(Adel) “Hello Damien, I am Doctor Adel, the one in charge of taking care of you”
(MC) “Introductions are great and all, but I would really like to know what is going on”
(Adel) “Impatient aren’t we, well considering your circumstances, I don’t blame you. You were in a car crash last week, causing your spinal cord to take severe damage, resulting in your current condition."
Suddenly Damien remembered everything. He had been in a car with Curtis, they were heading over to a friend's house when a car had suddenly slammed into the right side of Curtis's car, the loud noise of metal crashing into metal easily blocking out all of the other noises. However, he was too focused on the intense pains he felt all over his body, before he passed out from the pain.
(MC) "Will my body ever be back to the way it was before?"
(Adel) "Honestly, although you may regain some control over your body, the chances of you being able to walk ever again are close to zero."
Damien felt as if he had been smacked across the back of his head with a wooden bat, he had basically been told that he would have to live the rest of his life confined to a wheelchair. His promising future, suddenly turned bleak. He remembered all the hours he had put into training and learning jiu-jitsu, all those times he went out to play soccer with his friends; he would never be able to do those things again. Suddenly, he remembered.
(MC) “Wait, what happened to Curtis?! He was in the car with me, wasn’t he?!”
(Adel) “Ah yes, Curtis Coburn, he only suffered a minor concussion and some light bruising so he was sent home 4 days ago."
Although he felt relieved that his friend had come out of the accident nearly unscathed, he could not help but feel bitter at the unfair situation. Here he was, completely immobile and stuck in bed, while his friend had come out with only minor injuries.
(MC) "I would like to left alone right now please"
(Adel) "I understand, if you need anything, feel free to speak into the microphone to contact one of the nurses or myself"
Doctor Abel proceeded to place a small device near his pillow before leaving the room.
(Mrs. Close) "Ill come visit whenever I can, Damien"
And with that his mother also quietly left the room, closing the door gently behind her.
Damien just laid there, contemplating his life. Although he was usually a very positive person, he could find nothing positive about his current situation. Eventually, still exhausted from the incident and the sudden bad news, he fell asleep.
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The next couple of months passed by slowly. He had spent every day watching TV, listening to music and occasionally talking to his mother. His father had left for the United States a couple months prior to the accident and had still been unable to visit due to his heavy workload. Everyday felt the same, the only interesting event that had occurred was when his friend, Curtis, had visited him, and despite the fact that the incident was not his fault, visible guilt and pity was shown in Curtis's expressions. In addition, although he knew better, he could not help but feel bitter and treat Curtis coldly, since then, Curtis had not come to visit him again. Over time, Damien had slowly become more withdrawn and depressed as he began to wallow in self pity. At one point, he had even considered taking his own life, only to sadly realize that he did not even currently possess the ability to do so. Days continued to pass on like this until one day...
He had been listening to music when the door suddenly swung open, surprised by the sudden motion, he laid there, waiting for the individual to come into his view. Damien assumed that it would be his mother, father or even Curtis; however, to his surprise it was Doctor Adel. Doctor Adel had only ever visited him on Fridays for his weekly checkup, all of his other needs were taken care of by the nurses. Its not that they did not get along, but rather because Doctor Adel was a very busy individual and often did not have time to visit patients outside of their checkups.
(Adel) "Hello Damien, how are you feeling today?"
(MC) "The usual, fucking terrible."
(Adel) "Well then, thankfully I have some good news."
(MC) "What is it?"
(Adel) "You are going to have to ask me more politely if you want to hear."
(MC) "Are you serious?"
(Adel) "Yes"
(MC) "Sigh, can you please tell me the good news Doctor Adel?"
(Adel) "Of course I can."
Damien mutters to himself "I swear, if I ever regain control of my body, the first thing I am going to do is smack this shitty doctor."
(Adel) "Did you say something, Damien?"
(MC) "Nothing Doctor Adel, please continue on with what you were saying."
(Adel) "Ah, oh yes. Have you heard of the company, NW Corporation?"
(MC) "Yes, they are currently one of the leading video game companies."
(Adel) "Well apparently, they have come up with a virtual reality game called All World Online and are offering quadriplegic patients an opportunity to play the game for free."
(MC) "Whats the catch?"
(Adel) "They get to monitor you in game, in addition, they are given access to your health records."
(MC) "Why would they be interested in my health records?"
(Adel) "Although I was not told the reason, they probably want to get data on the effects of VR on quadriplegic patients, so that they could eventually come up with a product specially designed for rehabilitating quadriplegic patients. Although rare, there is a small chance of quadriplegic patients regaining full control over their body and many hypothesize that allowing a quadriplegic patient to move around in virtual reality may increase those chances."
(MC) "Hmmm, that kind of makes sense."
(Adel) "So do you accept the conditions or not?"
(MC) "Of course I accept, anything is better then being stuck in a shitty place like this and doing nothing but watch TV all day."
(Adel) "Excellent, the gaming device should arrive tomorrow morning if I put in the order now."
(MC) "Well then, get to it."
(Adel) "Sigh, you really need to fix your attitude, you shouldn't talk like that to someone older then you"
(MC) "Whatever."
(Adel) "Anyways, Ill see you tomorrow morning, goodbye Damien."
(MC) "Bye."
That night, Damien had trouble falling asleep, being given a chance to do something exciting and fun had made him giddy with joy. He soon began to remember the days where him and his friends would play video games together while yelling at each other in a group call. He remembered the stupid arguments that they had, and all the stupid shit they would do together, and with such thoughts in mind, he slowly fell asleep.
(Metal pans) "CLANK CLANK CLANK"
Damien, alarmed by the sudden loud noise. quickly woke up, only to see Doctor Adel holding two metal pans in his hands. Where he had gotten them, he had no clue, all he knew was that one day, he would kick this shitty doctor's ass even if he died trying.
(Adel) "Wake up sleepy head, the gaming device just arrived, it'll be set up soon so be ready."
Damien, fully awoken now, could see various workers working hard to set up the device, although he knew it was a complicated device, he was surprised at how complex and intricate it looked and could not help but wonder how regular players would set up the device by themselves.
(Adel) "Oh, and if you're wondering, you get a special device. It tracks your body's condition and let's us know if anything irregular is occurring with your body. It also comes with a screen so that the nurses and I can watch what you are doing within the game."
(Worker) "Doctor Adel, the device is fully set up now."
(Adel) "Excellent, nurses, could you please place Mr. Close into the device?"
(Nurses) "Yes Doctor Adel."
Although he did not like the idea of being carried around, Damien was not in a position to complain and honestly, the sooner he got in game, the better. After, being gently placed into the device, Damien was finally ready.
(Adel) "Are you ready Damien?)
(MC) "Yup, go ahead."
(Adel) "Okay, here we go."
*Adel closes the hatch on the device*
(Machine) " Vrrr rr r rrrrr"
*Machine starts running*
Suddenly a bright light engulfed Damien causing him to close his eyes, and when he opened them...
His adventure was finally about to start.
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