《Memoirs of an old traveler:First Rebirth》Status Update on the story direction
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Well after a few comments about how I did not do very well at all with the way some of the characters are portrayed I decided to change things somewhat, the next bunch of chapters were mostly more training and our mc's point of view but I am going to flesh out more of the other characters over the course of a few chapters instead. Somewhat of a detour but you guys were rather leery of things as they were now, while those comments hurt me this is my first ficiton so I am open to other comments about whether you think I am doing something wrong as long as you explain why you think it is wrong. I am only one person so what I think is fine could be bad to other people, actual explanations on why you think the plot is bad is better then unguided rants and nothing will change without input. Since I did not have this planned before hand don't expect chapters to always be on time but still at least once a week is probably going to happen
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