Fuuuu......it took unexpectedly long to correct mistakes in previous chapters, anyway corrected it as much as possible, please enjoy.

As I am an amateur writer I have little idea on what to work in my story, it sure could be nice to get some opinion on that, so I decided to make it a little interesting, for each good advise, suggestion, opinion I will do a extra chapter, though only 4 max per day, if it exceeds 4 I fill follow up on the next day.

Just to be sure I am not asking for review or rating, just tell me your opinion on story so far, any suggestion and advise are also welcome

Edit : the story is still in development phase intractable with nice and players will start soon, though it won't be much due to mc introverted personality.

AND SPECIAL THANKS TO tomolone for helpful suggestions