《Critique And Editing Info》Critique: The Bad Boy's Secret
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The Bad Boy's Secret
Not_Just_Anonymous
Humor, Love, Super hero, adventure
LOVE IT. A little generic, but I like it.
Sweet and straight to the point. States the topic, states there is a love interest and this story will have a different touch.
very good. I love the break of the 4th wall which is somewhat hard to do in writing novels. I like how the super powers aren't over the top powers. I do like how its written. (1st person) I do worry though about how the main character is to be 15? I feel he acts too mature for that age. I enjoy the humor and how he already realizes his mistakes. There are minimal errors. One of your readers actually commented where they are (Even though some I don't fully agree with. Hiddenly, is not a real word. Posh smosh. Shakespeare made up words).
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Mostly due to generic cover, the chapter was long (of all my years on Wattpad. It is suggested to do no more than 500 words per chapter). I actually might read on (if I find the time 😭)
Rate from 1-5
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2: Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4: Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
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