《Critique And Editing Info》Critique:The Forsaken Know My Name
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The Forsaken Know My Name
TONYANN
Fantasy, Horror, Paranormal, Romance
LOVE IT. A little blurry and can't read the smaller words.
I like it! States the problem within the character himself and the world around him.
Love the describing. To me it was too much, but some people enjoy that. It reminded me of Sarah J. Maas books how she describes every little detail. Also the Mate bond, Perfect!
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It's really good keep writing!
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2:Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4:Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
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