《Critique And Editing Info》Critique: Playing Pretend
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Playing Pretend
StorybookHorror
General Fiction, Adventure, Romance, Suspense
LOVE IT. Love how it's black and white.
Sweet and straight to the point. States the topic.
Very interesting. I've never read something like this before.
5 💙💙💙💙 💙
This story has TONS of potential. When I have time I'll read more. I can see this becoming the next Netflix series hit.
Rate from 1-5
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1: Poor/Needs MAJOR editing
2:Almost there/ needs fixing/need practice
3: Good/Needs a little editing
4:Good/Needs a little editing/may recommend/may read on
5: EXCELLENT/will recommend to followers, friends/may read on
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The Unexpected Engagement of the Marvelous Mr. Penn
In May, 1899, a hundred and fifty unassuming envelopes are delivered to households across the city. Most of them will be picked up by butlers and carried on silver trays to their recipients. All of them contain invitations to the wedding of Lady Eleanor Serrs to Mr. Ryce Penn. When the newspapers hear about it, they start buzzing. Who can blame them? This would be the wedding of the century! She’s the daughter of Duke Erravold Aubrey-Serrs, and the Marvelous Mr. Penn is one of the most famous men in the country. But Penn is famous for being the city’s most notorious thief. He’s an unrepentant attention-seeker with a taste for gems and danger. And Eleanor swears that she’s never met him. Chief Inspector Lucas Haley, Penn’s long-time nemesis, is called in to protect the Aubrey-Serrs family and try to figure out what the master thief is planning. He’ll need all his experience and tenacity for this case, as it quickly becomes obvious more is at stake than the reputation of an innocent woman.
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The Spirit Games
Bullied at school and neglected by his parents, Tom Fiddle finds himself at his wit's end, until he receives a strange email offering him a job as a cultivation clan's spirit automaton. But what *is* a spirit automaton? After a successful application, he gets an answer to his question: a spirit automaton is an arcane spirit attached to a pocket realm. They can shape this miniature world to their liking and conjure spiritual entities, usually monsters, out of thin air. Their role is to create and administer trial-by-fires. These life and death competitions determine whether a disciple is *chosen* or merely *trash* that deserves to be left by the wayside. Tom's new responsibility will affect the lives of millions of cultivators and shape the future of hundreds of worlds, dozens of galaxies, and eventually, the universe itself. Will Tom use his newfound power to torment others and merely benefit himself? Or will he rewrite the course of history and transform the path of cultivation from a path of blood and destruction, to one of peace and tranquility?
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My Universal beast system
"Wha...are you!?" Asked a Hero with a terror filled expression on his face. No matter what he does, nothing seems to work on the being in front of him. Hearing his question, a tawny yellow coloured beast with a majestic face reminisced. "Me? I am a Lion, what else?" "Lion?" Confusion apparent on the Hero's face as he didn't know what a Lion was…. (Story can be dark) New Update(March): I am having an exam, rare updates of chapters for a while. Please understand.
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Legacy of Blood
Ao Ruang lives in a village isolated from the outside world. Due to a tragic fate he finds himself far away from his home on the brink of death. Only to be entrusted with the legacy of a near extinct race.A Legacy he must embrace.A Legacy that fills humanity with suspicion and hate.A Legacy written in blood. Hello Author here!I hope you all are enjoying my take on a cultivation story. I wanted to take elements I enjoy from cultivation novels while avoiding some of the tropes and insane power creep. I want to keep things as grounded as possible. The story is a bit quick paced in the start, but you will find that it slows down to a decent pace later on. The romance is going to be a slow burn and I want to keep it a bit of a surprise. While our protagonist Ao Ruang is the main man of the story their were will be times other characters will get some love also.Lastly, there will be occasional goals from latest chapter if those goals are reached I will release a bonus side chapter that focuses on other characters we have met before and I'm considering having polls to decide who the side chapter will be on.Please consider supporting me in anyway you can. For now I'm just looking for people to review, suggest to others, and interact.Respectfully,Joseon Walking
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Photoshop Tutorial
photoshop tutorial and more. c:
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In Loving Memory of My Brother (My Green Guardian) ✓
|4X FEATURED AND SPOTLIGHT STORY| To learn to cope with death is one of the hardest obstacles any of us have to face, especially if that death was unexpected. When your whole world has changed, what do you do in order to overcome grief and keep your loved one's memory alive? ***I never knew how much trauma can affect a person until after my older brother died unexpectedly August 17th, 2021. I came out of the experience as not the Victoria I was used to, but the Victoria who now had a huge hole in her heart. I come from a long line of fighters. My family and I pulled off different strategies to help us move on from such a devastating death-strategies that I am going to share in this book. Sometimes the best way to overcome grief is to write about it. After all, writing is an escape to a different world-a world where I still have my Green Guardian.These pieces and pictures I'm going to share with you are not meant to depress anybody, but to illustrate just how wonderful a person Matthew was. His story is sad, but it's a story of hope. His legacy remains in my heart today, and I want to share it because I know I'm not the only person who has lost somebody so unexpectedly. ***Ovid (on when his brother died):"iamque decem vitae frater geminaverat annos, cum perit, et coepi parte carere mei."("And he had just doubled ten years of his life when he died, and with him, a part of me.")*Cover by @Nightfall_21!*Word Count: 7,000-8,000⭐ Featured on @StoriesUndiscovered || Change in Reality Reading List (May 1st, 2022).⭐ Featured on @nonfiction || Personal Struggles, Essays, and Coping Reading Lists.⭐ Featured on @nonfiction || Our #NonFicSpotlight (May Spotlight) Reading List.⭐ Featured on @nonfiction || Past Spotlights Reading List.
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