Caitlyn Tejada died last year. Nobody cares how and nobody cares why; everyone would rather forget the whole deal.

But when a crazed vandal scrawls creepy notes in the rooms of five teenagers, they're forced to decode the message and find answers to two questions.

One, who killed Caitlyn Tejada in their last year.

And two, who's next.

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Alison Carter is your average jock. Short hair, sweatshirts, cycling shorts and secrets.

Diego Torrez is Harvard bound, with his feet firmly on the ground. You get bonus points if you can change that.

Matt Hastings would rather take a drag of his cigarette than waste time talking to you. Ah, I wonder why.

Hunter Mason can fix cars and engines, and nothing else. Wouldn't you like to know what -- or rather who -- he's destroyed lately? I would.

Emilie Badeaux needs to keep the crown up. But more than that, she needs to make sure it's on her head and nobody else's...and I wonder how she manages it. She won't tell.

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There are questions. And there are answers.

And this one's oozing with both of them...and more.

Your cover is neat and organized. However, since this looks like a typography cover, I suggest spending more time on the presentation of the title. What fonts can you mess with to make the title really stand out in your cover? For typography covers, obviously the title is the most important part. You want to make it as interesting as possible. What sizes/styles can you use to experiment with this?

The title is intriguing and fits your genre well. This isn't a common title on Wattpad, so that's already an advantage for your story. It rings well, stays in my mind, and is a perfect fit for your story's content. Well done!

For the most part, there's nothing to change with your blurb. The only reason I took off a point is because a blurb is exactly that: A blurb. This looks more like a synopsis which you can include in your actual story. For the blurb, I suggest only keeping the top half, as the bottom half is not necessary to hook in potential readers.

I didn't spot any grammatical errors, and you started the story with your character's surroundings and the general mood of the prologue. It definitely could have been more interesting. For example, maybe there was an accident in the restaurant. Plates could have shattered, and you could describe the shards on the school as a metaphor for your character's current mood. That way, your story would start off with a bang, and immediately leave a lasting impression on your readers. This is optional, of course, but I encourage you to think of other ways to spice up the beginning.

You struggled with your punctuation/capitalization regarding your dialogue. Keep in mind that if an action tag is accompanying the dialogue, it should be a separate sentence. The beginning of the action tag is always capitalized, and the end of the dialogue can end in anything except a comma. The opposite goes for dialogue tags: the dialogue tag is part of the sentence, so the beginning of the dialogue tag shouldn't be capitalized, and the punctuation of the dialogue should end in anything except a period.

Example of dialogue + dialogue tag: "'I'm okay,' she said." OR "She said, 'I'm okay.'"

Example of dialogue + action tag: "'I'm okay.' She forced a smile." OR "She forced a smile. 'I'm okay.'"

You had a few comma mistakes. Commas are used to separate different clauses. There are two types of clauses: Independent and dependent. They both have subjects (who/what is doing the action), and a predicate (the action being done). The difference between the two is that an independent clause can stand alone as its own sentence, while a dependent clause depends on another clause to make sense. If more than one clause is joined together, they should be separated with a comma. For example, this sentence, "I cried, then Billy ran away," there are two different independent clauses. One is "I cried," and the other is "Billy ran away." You'll notice that they're separated with a conjunction and a comma. You often misuse commas in this sense or forget to add them. Commas can also be used to separate an introductory phrase or word before the main clause. In the sentence, "Today I went to work," the independent clause is "I went to work," and you'll notice that it has a subject "I" and a predicate "went." The word "today" is excluded, and needs to be separated with a comma. The correction is: "Today, I went to work." There were some instances in your writing where you used unnecessary commas or missed commas, and I've only pointed out a few for you. The rest are for you to find on your own.

You also had an issue with comma splices and incomplete sentences. A comma splice is joining two or more clauses together without a needed conjunction. An example of this is: "I went to work, I drove in my car." These are two different independent clauses: "I went to work" and "I drove in my car." There should be a conjunction added, or the comma should be replaced with a period. The correction is: "I went to work, and I drove in my car." OR "I went to work. I drove in my car." For your incomplete sentences, they aren't really incomplete, but they are continued direct thoughts of the previous clause, and shouldn't be started as a new sentence. I've pointed out some examples down below.

You had unnecessary capitalization as well. Titles should always be capitalized unless there is a possessive pronoun in front of them. For example, "Mom" is capitalized when used alone. However, when you say, "my mom," it doesn't have to be capitalized. You were confused with this rule throughout your writing, and you also capitalized unnecessary words, which I've pointed down below.

I was impressed by how clean your writing was. I didn't find any spelling errors/typos. However, there were some instances where you used unnecessary filler words. When writing, always think of the best way to write a sentence, keeping it short and tightened; all the while having the best impact on your audience.

The idea and concept you're going for here is intriguing. There are similar plots with Mystery/Thriller genres, but by reading the prologue, I can see that you're going in the right direction. You have a clear idea of your plot and story pacing. You executed this first chapter exceptionally well, and should be proud.

Your characters didn't stand out to me. If I was just a reader, I would have stayed for the plot, not your characters. I wasn't familiarized with Diego's personality or characteristics. When introducing new characters, I suggest finding details to anchor them to your readers. What interesting physical flaws does he have? What habits does he have when he's nervous? His character felt miniscule and faint to me; I couldn't get a feel for his character voice. I suggest strengthening the bond between your characters and readers. That way, if your readers don't like the plot, they'd (most likely) still stay for the characters.

You had a distinct writing voice, and the way you executed this chapter had me pulled into the story. Your writing style stayed consistent. The only thing I was troubled with were your grammatical errors. Just by cleaning those up, you'd have a huge advantage against other amateur writers. You also had some repetition with your phrases, but other than that, there was nothing for me to nitpick at.

As I've mentioned earlier, you had some repetition with some transition phrases, even as small as paragraph transitions. They weren't too obvious, but I still suggest keeping that in mind for future writing. In addition, you often over-described many obvious things. You don't need to describe how someone opens a door; just say they opened a door. I've pointed out an example down below, but this applies to your entire chapter. Because of how you're over-explaining, it almost feels like you're trying to make this chapter longer or you're struggling to transition; which I'm sure is just a habit. Shorten and tighten up these phrases, and that way, you'll be reducing the awkward sentence structuring and slowing story pace.

In paragraph 1, "Physics" shouldn't be capitalized. Unless it's a language, school subjects shouldn't be capitalized. This suggestion applies to the other times you capitalize this word throughout the chapter.

"I sigh. 'Yes, mom.'" (p.5). Here, the word "mom" should be capitalized, as you're using it as a title. Unless you have a possessive pronoun in front of it (my/your/her/his/their), "Mom" is always capitalized. Correction: "I sigh. 'Yes, Mom.'"

"'Can't blame your mother,' Augusta sighs." (p.14). The action tag accompanying your dialogue is not part of the sentence. It is a new sentence, and therefore, the dialogue should end in a period to signify that the sentence ends and a new one starts. Correction: "'Can't blame your mother.' Augusta sighs."

"Fifteen minutes to seven thirty." (p.20). You should have a hyphen here. Correction: "Fifteen minutes to seven-thirty." This suggestion applies to the other times that you use "seven thirty" in this chapter.

"'Leaving,' I scowl." (p.25). "I scowl" is an action tag, and action tags should never be continued from the dialogue sentence. By ending the dialogue with a comma, you're saying that this is one sentence, when it isn't. Correction: "'Leaving.' I scowl."

"If you know what's good for you." (p.30). This sentence is technically incomplete. It's a clause that should be a continuation of the previous sentence, as the thought still continues. Correction: "Stay away from my girlfriend, dumbass, if you know what's good for you."

"I grab the stick with not even an ounce of my force, and Jaxon is pinned up against the wall." (p.35). You're using passive voice. Passive voice is saying that something was done, rather than saying something happened. The latter has a better impact on your audience, so I suggest avoiding passive voice. Suggestion: "I grab the stick with not even an ounce of my force and pin Jaxon up against the wall." I also removed an unnecessary comma.

"I'm Enrique's brother, you wouldn't let yourself think that he hadn't taught me a few basic survival skills." (p.38). You have a comma splice here. A comma splice is connecting two or more clauses together without adding a necessary conjunction. You can either add a conjunction, or replace the comma with a period. In this case, you should use a period. Correction: "I'm Enrique's brother. You wouldn't let yourself think that he hadn't taught me a few basic survival skills." Another option is using a semicolon.

"Abuelita's hands are round my neck..." (p.40). You're using "round" as a contraction for "around," so there should be an apostrophe before it. Correction: "Abuelita's hands are 'round my neck..."

"That and everything else in our humble home." (p.41). You need a comma here. Correction: "That, and everything else in our humble home."

In paragraph 47, "nana" is used as a title, and therefore should be capitalized.

"I'm halfway up the stairs to the first landing, when she replies." (p.47). You have an unnecessary comma here. Correction: "I'm halfway up the stairs to the first landing when she replies."

"'Very, but your Abuelo still has those conferences to attend,' she sighs..." (p.48). You have a possessive pronoun in front of "Abuelo," so it shouldn't be capitalized. In addition, the action tag should be a separate sentence from the dialogue. Correction: "'Very, but your abuelo still has those conferences to attend.' She sighs..."

"I place my hand on the cold brass knob and twist it." (p.50). You have a tendency to over-explain things. You don't need to write about how your protagonist opens the door, or how the door opens. This slows down the pace of your story, so I suggest explaining obvious things. Instead, you could just write, "I open the door."

You have a lot of potential with your writing capabilities here! I still found some minor grammatical errors, and you have a habit of explaining obvious things in your writing. Because of that, your story pacing was slower and considerably awkward. However, once you work on strengthening your weaknesses, the impact of your writing will have a stronger effect on your audience.