Staying astray is really admirable because not all people have the courage to stay afar and let go of the correctness of what they are supposed to do, and wander off to the virgin path of what they actually want to do.

Everybody is desperate for a new beginning after making it to the end of a traumatic experience. Gerry was, too. After a lot of hemorrhaging, scratched skin and broken bones, she finally made her mind to immigrate to an unfamiliar city, seeking solace in a place, where the journey of a loved one began.

Little did she knew, an alive souvenir of a reminiscent travel was twiddling his thumbs in anticipation, waiting for her.

I appreciate that the title and author's name is clearly visible on the cover. One thing I've noticed is your cover seems to be more of a collage of images, which typically doesn't work well as a story cover. My reasoning is that there are too many images used for the readers to focus on. A cover should have one or two main points that help a character understand the genre or overall plot. This cover includes images related to water and books, which hints at the mood of the story, but there are too many other books that include some kind of body of water/books. How can you make it so the cover conveys more specifics of your story? There was a repetition for the images of water, and using more than one photo of the same thing wouldn't make it more clear to a reader. I suggest using one main image and focus (it could be a couple, since this is in the romance genre) and building off your cover from that.

The title is simple and easily hints at the mood of the story. Based on the title, I can assume that this is a story based on everyday life or possibly real-life events. From your blurb, I can see the title works with your story, but it seems to have a vague or generic description of the story. Personally, I think the title has a nice ring to it. However, if you ever choose to rename your story, I always suggest using a title unique to only your story. This could be that the title is based on a character's name, a specific location, symbol, object, etc. That way, you can avoid having the same title as other stories.

Right off the bat, I see several problems with your blurb. There are a lot of grammatical errors, including, but not limited to, comma mistakes, tense inconsistency, etc. Your blurb also contains long, confusing sentences. While I was reading through it, I got more of the sense that you were writing from off the top of your head, and that this blurb itself could be more polished and revised.

Staying astray is really admirable because not all people have the courage to stay afar and let go of the correctness of what they are supposed to do, and wander off to the virgin path of what they actually want to do.

Everybody is desperate for a new beginning after making it to the end of a traumatic experience. Gerry is, too. After a lot of hemorrhaging, scratched skin, and broken bones, she finally makes up her mind to immigrate to an unfamiliar city, seeking solace in a place where the journey of a loved one begins.

Little does she know, an alive souvenir of a reminiscent travel is twiddling his thumbs in anticipation, waiting for her.

Above is an edited version of your blurb. I've removed and replaced any grammar errors. However, before you copy and paste it to replace your former blurb, keep in mind that this is far from polished. You tend to have rambling sentences, an excess of adverbs, and vague/generic statements that don't hint at your plot at all. For example, you have a lot of redundant words clogging up your sentences, such as "really" in the first paragraph. Your sentences are confusing, and you could brush up on your diction choice to shorten up sentences on the longer side. It's hard to appreciate the detail placed in your blurb because of the long sentences and unnecessary diction used, and by shortening your blurb to be concise and clear will make it a much easier reading experience for your potential audience.

The first thing I noticed was your beautiful writing voice. You have an eye for detail, and reading the beginning of your story felt like admiring art. However, there is room for improvement on the more technical side. You had several grammar errors, such as with punctuation, the separation of certain paragraphs, comma errors, missing hyphens, etc. Additionally, while prose can be fun to build and craft, purple prose (excessive details) can block the reading experience for your audience, rather than enhance it. Too many details make it more confusing for your readers to understand, so I'd advise against using too many adjectives or adverbs in every sentence. Sometimes, simpler is the more practical route to go.

You struggled with your punctuation and capitalization with dialogues. If your dialogue is accompanied with a dialogue tag (he said, she yelled, they shouted, describing the way someone says something), the dialogue tag is a continuation of the dialogue sentence. For example, it makes little sense for the clause, "She said," to be a sentence by itself. Therefore, it's part of the dialogue sentence. The dialogue should end in a comma to indicate that the sentence isn't complete, and the start of a dialogue tag is not capitalized, as it's not the start of a new sentence. The opposite goes for action tags. If your dialogue is accompanied by an action tag (she grinned/he sighed/they walked away, basically an action), the action should not be part of the dialogue sentence. The dialogue doesn't help the action tag make sense; the action tag should be a sentence by itself. Therefore, the dialogue should end in a period to signify the end of the sentence, and the start of the action tag should always be capitalized, as it's the start of a new sentence. Of course, the punctuation may vary. Exclamation marks and question marks can end a dialogue regardless of the tag accompanying it, as long as if it's a dialogue tag, the dialogue never ends in a period, and for an action tag, it never ends in a comma.

Example of dialogue + dialogue tag: "'I'm okay,' she said." OR "She said, 'I'm okay.'"

Example of dialogue + action tag: "'I'm okay.' She forced a smile." OR "She forced a smile. 'I'm okay.'"

You had a lot of comma mistakes. Keep in mind that commas are used to separate different clauses within a sentence, whether they're independent or dependent. An independent clause has a subject (who/what is doing the action) and a predicate (the action being done by the subject). Oftentimes, a sentence has two independent clauses, joined with a conjunction. In the sentence, "I cried then Billy ran away," there are two independent clauses here. One is, "I cried," and the other is, "Billy ran away." Both have a subject and a predicate, and they're joined together by the conjunction, "then." Because of this, the two clauses still need to be separated with a comma, the correction being: "I cried, then Billy ran away."

Dependent clauses are just like independent clauses: they also have a subject and a predicate. However, dependent clauses are exactly like what they sound like; they're dependent on another clause. They don't make sense as themselves. For example, the clause, "I decided not to," has both a subject and a predicate, but it needs more context to make sense. There should be another clause attached or a sentence before it that it depends on making sense. When joined to another clause with a conjunction, the dependent clause should still be separated with a comma as well.

Commas are also used to separate an introductory phrase or word before the main clause. In the sentence, "Today I went to work," the independent clause is "I went to work," where the subject is "I," and the predicate/action is "went to work." The word "today" is not included in the clause, and therefore should be separated with a comma. The correction would be: "Today, I went to work." This is a lot of information to take in, but try to keep these rules in mind for the next time you're writing.

I noticed the amount of comma splices used as well. A comma splice is joining two different independent clauses together, and separating them with a comma, but not a conjunction. An example of this is: "I went to work, I drove in my car." These are two different independent clauses, "I went to work" and "I drove in my car." They both have predicates and subjects, and are separated with a comma. However, you must separate them with a conjunction as well. Without a conjunction, this turns into a comma splice. You have two options in this case. You can either replace the comma with a period and turn it into two different sentences, or add in a conjunction. In this case, the correction can be, "I went to work, and I drove in my car," or "I went to work. I drove in my car." You have many cases of comma splices in your writing, which I've pointed out for you. There were many that I haven't pointed out, so make sure to do that.

You often slipped up in your tense. Whether your story is set in past or present tense, you need to pick one and stay in it. If you're in past tense, you should use words such as "didn't" and "wanted." If you're writing in present tense, you should use "don't" and "want." I've shown a few examples where you slipped up your tense below, so keep this rule in mind for future writing.

You had unnecessary capitalization as well. Titles should always be capitalized unless there is a possessive pronoun in front of them. For example, "Mom" is capitalized when used alone. However, when you say, "my mom," it doesn't have to be capitalized. You were confused with this rule throughout your writing, and you also capitalized unnecessary words, which I've pointed down below.

You struggled with apostrophes and contractions. For example, the contraction "let's" and the word "lets" have different meanings, and should be applied appropriate depending on the context of the scene. Before adding an apostrophe, say out the full words "let us" and see if it makes sense.

There were several instances I noticed where you misused a word, misspelled a word, etc. Spelling typos are incredibly easy to fix, so I suggest thoroughly editing a chapter before uploading it to Wattpad. Additionally, you tend to reuse several diction choices or descriptions, which makes the flow of the story sound repetitive. I suggest expanding your vocabulary and choice of diction to avoid this.

I appreciate that I can see a clear relation between the title and the story. The flashbacks tie back into the title, and the overall flow of the story was smooth and uninterrupted. However, I also noticed that you have a habit of describing things in an unnecessary manner. For example, you'd write a whole paragraph or long sentence of how your protagonist widened her eyes or opened a door. This makes the story drag, as your audience is not here to learn of those things. Similarly, I suggest cutting out descriptions describing the mundane aspects of your protagonist's life. Your readers don't need to know her makeup routine or the way she assembles her classroom. The flashbacks included in each chapter were interesting to read, but they weren't always appropriately placed. I feel that as a reader, the impact of the flashback would've been greater if the flashback itself was introduced at a more crucial moment in the present story. Your character seems to be alternating between past and present, so make sure that they go together to make a seamless narrative.

The one thing that stood out to me was how clearly I could see each character. They all had their distinct personalities. For example, the nana was brave, fearless, and sarcastic, and the protagonist longed to be like her. The relationships between your characters made it easier to understand the story this way. However (and your writing voice takes part in this as well), your characters' voices were muddy at best. There were a lot of contradictions happening, and a lot of repetition from the way they spoke. I found it curious that some of these characters were from different parts of the world, yet had the same style of speaking. A great author has the ability to write each character in a way so they even sound different from one another. You're on the right track, however, and after taking care of your grammatical errors and cleaning up unnecessarily long sentences, I suggest tackling this to represent each character thoroughly and differently each time.

You use long sentences. This is one thing that became glaringly obvious to me as I continued to review each chapter. You'll notice that you tend to use a lot of commas in your sentences; sentences that should be short and separated. This results in misplaced commas and comma splices, all of which I've mentioned above when grading your grammar. To avoid this problem, I suggest shortening your sentences in length. Get rid of any filler words that add weight to your sentences but don't add weight to your story. Experiment with the structure of your sentences to make them flow smoothly and seamlessly. Avoid adverbs and contradictions. I also noticed that while you had some beautiful descriptions in your first chapter, they were too much. Those descriptions can classify as purple prose, which is excessive prose/details that block the clarity of the story. Additionally, avoid describing simple things that don't need to be described. Don't try to expand exactly how Gerry nods her head or widens her eyes, as it drags the story pacing.

As I've probably mentioned a few times above, you had unnecessary descriptions and explanations in places where they were not necessary. As a result, the overall flow of your story dragged in some places and went by quickly in others. By removing unnecessary descriptions, you might shorten your chapters, but it'll be easier for your audience to understand. On the other hand, there were places in the five chapters where you didn't expand upon your protagonist's reflections or actions. This made the scenes feel rushed and not thoroughly thought through. I suggest slowing down in those areas and thinking them out before putting them out in the world. I've mentioned some examples down below.