《Salty Book Review》Review #5
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You asked for a brutally honest review so I'll be writing this as raw and real as I can.
Your title is eye-catching – amazing honestly. It doesn't overshare the plot of the story and it's far from plain. It's unique and just as captivating as the cover is. The font is a brilliant choice for this specific book and I felt like the color was also a perfect match. I can't find any faults whatsoever.
10/10
Fantasy doesn't really seem like it should fit the story in my personal opinion. I mean, I looked it up and your story is considered fantasy, but it doesn't feel right. I'll just blame it on the fact that I've hardly seen any fantasy books on here.
: 9.5/10
Your summary is way too long and I couldn't sit long enough to read it. It's spoiling the good qualities that your story has, and a lot of it could be added to the prologue. Shorten it so it won't push the readers away.
0/10
Each character is more unique from the others which is good. My only issue is that their personalities/lives seem like it revolves around the mystical realm. That's a problem that a lot of writers encounter – not giving their characters lives outside of the main plot. I'll be reading on but I really think that you should pay attention to that aspect.
I haven't read far enough to see anything, so I won't critique you on this.
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You seem like you've written it out well but your first few pages are boring. There's no world-building or descriptions of the characters. As writers, we tend to add pictures of everything and forget to describe the scenes; we fall back on the visual image that's right there. So there's a party going on, right? Tell me more. How well decorated is the place and where is the event being held? In your two-story house or in your one-story flat? Also Grammarly is the best tool any writer could ask for. I'd recommend installing it so it can find those errors that you don't see.
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3/10
This book will be on my mind for a while. It has the potential to be more than what it currently is, but it needs a lot of glossing over.
10/10
Thank you for sending me your book! I look forward to reading another one of your works and recommend me to your friends if you're pleased with this review.
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