《Book reviews *Requests Closed*》#3: 'Strange' by artistx
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Review number three! This book is written by @artistx and is called 'Strange'.
The cover of the book shows a hand reaching out and a dark forest. It's interesting and fitting. I like it.
The book is about a girl, Anise, who moves to a new house and has a creepy neighbour named Tyler. This kind of reminds me of Obsession, the book I reviewed previously.
The name Anise is actually a lot like my real name, so I thought it was a funny name, but okay, that's not really important.
The characters also remind me a lot of Obsession. There's a psycho kid, the stupid parents, the older sibling.... you get me. Most of them are interesting, but the parents are a little cringey and I'd like to know more about Anise's brother Noah.
The grammar and spelling are fine, but there are occasional mistakes. Don't worry, I've seen worse.
Now for the tips:
Tyler could be a little more creepy. I mean, sure, he acts off, but he could also pass as your jerky neighbourhood weirdo. There's a lot of things you can do with him: is he a dangerous psychopath? A vampire? A serial killer? A cannibal? A vampire?
I know I said vampire twice. I like vampires.
So, Tyler could be a creepier; on to the next point.
Is your story planned out entirely, or do you just sit down at random moments to write and see what happens? In the earlier chapters especially, it feels a bit like you don't really know where you're going with the story (correct me on this if I'm wrong. Please.)
If you haven't planned it out, you could try to write down what you want to happen in each chapter and stick to that. It's what I do. (It doesn't alwats work though)
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Lastly, a minor detail: in one of the earlier chapters, Anise states that she has more teachers than just Ms. Bridge, but that they aren't mentioned because they are irrelevant to the story.
Breaking the fourth wall is fine, because it adds humour to your story. But, when you say that something is irrelevant to the story, literally say it in those words, you are reminding the readers that they are, in fact, reading a book.
Good books are supposed to make you feel like you are in the story, that you're not just reading a book. Characters being too self-aware and knowing they're in a book ruins that mood.
You can, however, do the above if your story or that specific chapter is meant to be silly/humorous. It is definitely a funny thing to experiment with every once in a while!
I'm giving this story a 7 on a scale of 1 to 10. I hope the review was helpful!
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