《Book reviews *Requests Closed*》'Is It Too Much To Ask For Your Heart? by edara1999
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This very romantic story was written by edara1999 and frankly, I feel conflicted about it.
The story is about Oceane and Osian, a boy and a girl who happen to be in love. But Osian still has an ex with mysterious motives.
So don't get me wrong here. The plot is, in essence, like many other romance stories. There isn't really anything I found really... original. It just felt like I was reading through a stack of romance tropes the whole time.
The characters feel a bit bland and unrealistic too. You know why? They pretty much do nothing besides being in love or angsting about everything that has to do with their love. Do they have hobbies? Big dreams besides being with their soulmate? Fears that have nothing to do with their soulmate? God, do they even have a life outside of being with their soulmate? And in the end, Oceane is immediately best friends with the person she's hated for years after a simple apology? What the actual fuck?
There is a lot of room for more character/plot development, and honestly, stories need it. Just like how dark/angsty stories don't need to be dark and angsty in every single scene, romance stories don't need to have romance in every single scene.
The GPS is, aside from occasional punctuation mistakes, really good.
On a more positive note, the romance in the story, though too unrealistic and sweet, is well written. Really. If the characters and plot were more developed, I'd be jealous of your romance writing skills.
Rating: 5
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