《Book reviews *Requests Closed*》'Amnesia' by seaofroses07
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Not gonna lie, when I started reading this book, I disliked it. It had 76 long chapters and the plot just wasn't interesting to me. It seemed vague and all over the place. The story was slow and it was like the thibgs that could've been the most interesting where just ignored.
I do have to say that my opinion changed a bit while reading
Let's talk about the plot for a second: the book is about Addison Pierce, a girl suffering from amnesia. She's dropped off at the prestigious Eaton Academy in London. There, she has to deal with Blair, a mean girl who leads a rich group of students who call themselves the Elites, and Caiden, a boy who seems to hate her for no reason at all.
Let me briefly list a few of the (wattpad) clichés I've found in this story:
-amnesia (yes, that's overused)
- prestigious academy
-academy is located in London
-Elite group of students
-bitchy leader of the elites
-(bad)boy who hates protagonist for seemingly random reason
-aforementioned boy is obviously going to be the love interest
-'friend' betrays protagonist for rich girl
-unplanned pregnancy
-smol child who 'is just the cutest'
-protagonist drowns in self-loathing
-barely any diversity whatsoever (everyone's straight and probably white)
- 'psychopaths' who just. Fail to be realistic.
I could go on like this, but I'll stop now.
The characters too. I've already listed some things in the clichés above, but they're pretty much all Mary Sues. I've really seen no one who I really couldn't have found in at least a dozen of other Wattpad books.
In the book's defense, 'cause I'm burning it down a little now: the plot starts making more sense and becomes more interesting in the later chapters and the characters do grow on you. It just takes a lot of time to reach those points and that does raise some red flags: a little more authenticity would be appreciated.
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The Grammar and spelling are fine for the most part, but the punctuation could use some editing. It could really do with a lot more commas, please. The story gets a little confusing if you don't add them when necessary.
So if you have a lot of time on your hands and aren't too nitpicky (unlike me) when it comes to characters and plot, then you should give it a try.
Rating: 6
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