I loved this book! I read the first chapter and was hooked! I loved how you portrayed the characters, and even without knowing anything about them, I liked them right away, and that didn't change throughout the book. Great character development, all of them! I love your writing style. It is easy to read, it flows nicely, great dialogue! It needs a little editing, but there was nothing too major that it bothered me.

I've read the book before I read your help request, but I saw your author's notes about showing instead of telling. I'm struggling with that as well, so I'm no help with that. But I didn't notice anything, partly because I was so into the story. And I never felt like you were over-explaining. At some point, though, I skipped the author's notes ;)

I have no idea about the BDSM community, but I do hope it is like you described it. I loved the respect your characters showed, and that example of how it shouldn't be done was well executed in my eyes. I loved the emotions you conveyed (you see, I'm using that word a lot ;) ), and this book went straight on the list of my favorite reads! I will definitely read the prequel! Great job!

~Lilly

I don't have a lot to give as far as feedback here because I've discussed the book privately with the author and I've given suggestions via comments. I love the book, especially Lani and Jacob. My biggest suggestion was to not hold back. The reader likes the background information and drama. Explaining events in detail makes them connect with the character's emotions connected to the event and you don't have to worry about getting gritty at times.

I have also suggested that this book be situated as book two, once what was supposed to be the prequel is finished. I think that will help the readers connect to the characters even more if read in that order. In all though, I found it easy to binge read this story and I love the author's clear and concise way of storytelling. She describes exactly what is necessary and important without bogging down the story with unnecessary information.

The pacing is good and the spicy scenes are well done. The author knows she's found a fan in me.

~T

The Will to Serve is about Luna, a sub, and her dom, Jacob. A former dom has come into the picture to stir up old emotions in Luna to which Jacob must deal with. This is what I think the story is about. Going into the story I didn't expect to become so engrossed in this story as fast as I did. The writing style is really good like it's easy to read through. The flow was on point. The characters were believable though I will be reading further to find out more about Luna as her story does interest me. I'm curious about her past. The author was on point with the characters and the descriptions. In my opinion, she does a good job with storytelling. I thought there was a perfect mix of showing and telling. From the few chapters I read, I will definitely be checking out more from this author.

~Ellen

From the excerpt, I'm expecting another Dom/sub romance. The issue with the previous Dom is a bit confusing for me. The author alludes that he physically hurt her by not accepting her limits. But then, she also is said to have lost since confidence because he ghosted her.

In the initial meeting between them, he makes some comment about him expecting her to wait for his return.

Character-wise, Luna is said to be a powerhouse with this strong personality. But the writing portrays her as submissive even when away from Jacob. She doesn't come across as the type of person who says no often.

I like, however, that the author evokes emotions with her characters. For example, I don't like Bryan. He comes across as the kind of man that likes to exploit those he perceives to be weaker.

~Csuigar

What did you think the book was about?

The book is about a contracted BDSM relationship and the female protagonist has fairly strong feelings for the male lead and wants more than a contracted relationship. That was my overall vibe for the chapters I read.

Did you feel that the book filled your expectations?

For the most part, it was good. I stumbled a lot throughout the writing, there are several fragmented sentences where words seem to be missing, and I couldn't follow the overall sentence and figure out what was meant by it. So I do think it would fill my expectations a lot more if the writer does a full edit sweep over their writing. None of us are perfect and I even messed up big time in my own writing. But reading your writing aloud will help a lot and give is such a better flow.

What about the plot?

I've seen this type of plot before with contracted BDSM. I think as long as it different and unique unlike other novels it has a lot of potential in being a great read.

Do the characters seem real and relatable?

I haven't felt much for the characters from what I read. The first chapter was a long sex scene and I didn't see names at all. So I was disconnected from the characters from the chapter since there was no identity on them, only "she" and "he" I think if the writer would like more reliability from the beginning, to add character flaws and other quirks at the start. Add who they are and what they mean to each other to give the first chapter meaning. Then I think the relatability will flourish for the writer.

How was the pacing of the chapters you read?

The pacing was good through the chapters. I didn't feel rushed through different scenes or dialogue.

How was the description of the chapters?

This area I highly suggest to have an active voice instead of passive voice. A passive voice tends to have words "had, were, was, is." It usually put in front of an adjective or verb. The passive tense word can be removed in front of the verb. The verb with an ING ending should be replaced with an ED ending or S depending on what tense you are using. It will make the descriptions and action active and will give the book a better overall flow. I tend to remove these words as much as possible in my writing and restructure descriptions to avoid them.

Describe what you liked or disliked about the authors writing style?

What I mentioned for improvement are in the other questions. I do feel the writer did well on her sensory details and internal dialogue. She does well in trying to display the characters emotions, feelings, and sensations. She does some basic sensory details to help paint a picture for the readers to see. Overall, I think she has a lot of great components down. We all have areas to improve on and I hope my suggestions help her out a bit when it comes to editing.

Would you read more of the author's work?

Of course :) Thank you for letting me read.

~Steph

This book exceeded my expectations. It had a strong beginning and I could really feel what the characters were feeling in each situation as the story progressed. The plot was realistic. Overall I felt that the story flowed together well. The characters were very relatable and reacted appropriately. The descriptions were what stood out the most about this novel. The Weakest part of the story I felt was that I felt lost at certain periods, which happened around the chapter 3-4 part. I found I was able to figure out what was happening after reading on though. The pace worked well, I did feel that it picked up pace after the first two chapters. I would definitely consider reading more of your work as it is on par with other published novels.

~Genelle

Review: The will to serve.

Read 7 Chapters so far.

It took me a few chapters to understand what the book was about, but I personally enjoy those kinds of beginnings. I didn't really know what to expect before I started reading. Mainly because I just browsed through the description and didn't really study the cover. After studying it later: I really liked the cover. It's sensual and reveals the theme in an elegant way. The description was okay, but it didn't really give justice to the amazing writing you get to enjoy once you've started reading. I'm not sure if I would have read the book just based on the description, but I'm sure glad I did. Once I started reading it, it was hard to put down. Suggestion: Maybe add a longer sample-section in the description?

The first chapter was a really good way to start the story. It sets the scene for what kind of book it is, and gives an introduction to the main characters that intrigued me but without giving too much away too soon.

It's a very realistic plot and it is supported by very human and believable characters. For me, it's mainly the human insecurities, the fear of the consequences of communicating truthfully and the stigma around untraditional sexuality that makes it relatable.

My impression of Luna so far is that she is fragile and vulnerable, and I can't really see the strength that she herself refers to in the first chapter. Still, I like her as a sub, find her relatable and am curious to see how she develops throughout the story. Jacob is portrayed a bit different than other Dom's in stories I've read, but it's refreshing. I like that he's gentle, caring. and protective, and that it seems to be personality traits that he's always had. They are not something Luna is pulling out of him, even if he feels differently about her then previous sub's.

I like the pacing of the chapters. They move the story along in a pace that keeps me interested. I have a tendency to lose focus if the chapters in between the two main characters interacting get too long or take the story too of course from what I want to read about (main plot). This is not an issue here. I did not skip a single paragraph and it wasn't because this is a book club read and I felt I had to read everything. I wanted to.

The story has really good descriptions. I get the information I need to follow the story and picture the different settings. For someone who isn't as familiar with the BDSM-world, it helps to understand the story.

The descriptions of intimacy are especially good. They are by far my favorite parts. I've had a few flushed cheeks reading it. I like that there is no hurry and that the detailed descriptions make it easy to follow every movement, every touch, every breath. It's the kind of attention to detail an erotic story needs to make the reader blush and feel the tugs and stirrings in their own body.

All in all, a really well-written story that will be staying in my library as a favorite.

~Kay

My heart was shattered when Luna told Jacob about her past with her previous Master Bryan. I realize that trust is the number one thing in the BDSM community and I read that a lot of Masters or wannabe Masters as I called them, abuse that kind of trust to do things their way by not letting their submissive control too. This story is rather dark but kinda good. But to be honest, it didn't pull me in like other erotic novels I've read. It kinda makes me feel like most people who want to join that community needs to understand that it's not about forcing people or controlling them to do their bidding. It's about trust and understanding of each other and helping others to shed away their insecurities that will get in the way while doing this lifestyle. But all in all, this story is very good just really dark.

~Jasz