《Delicate as Glass》Original chapters comments and critique
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If you'd like to read the original version of Delicate as Glass, then comment or send me a PM, and I'll reply as soon as I can with reading info. The old opening is pretty bad, which is why you'll see critical comments below. They helped me forge the story into something better, so I appreciate them all. Thanks for the honesty!
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Total War Online: The Warchiefs
Can the will of one man control the fate of millions? The barbarian tribes of Yunnan plain spent centuries entangled in their own petty feuds. Lantis Shimray, a humanities student plus gamer attempts to assimilate the various neighbouring tribal fiefdoms into his own tribe, which he then must defend from the machinations of other player states and The Holy See itself. And should he accomplish all of those feats, there is always a world conquest to wage. But the question still remains how can a tribe of mere rabbles using spears and cotton armour for war, could possibly overcome the military might of other tribes? let alone the technologically advanced empires of other veteran players? Dive into a game, where you are not a hero or a dark lord but a simple observer changing the course of the world, your tribe and your people. Realise that what you are doing is not for the greater good or any of those cliché shits but for your people’s survival. Know that you are not a conqueror but a starved wolf in the wilderness. Sense and feel the ultimate desperation and hunger to call a land your own “home”. This is an age of Total War. This is Dominations!
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Suits
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Dreamland
Dolores is a lucky girl with a high-level avatar in a very popular game. She did not level it up; she got it through some fortunate circumstances. She is not interested in fighting and levelling; all she wants is to have some fun and follow her own fantasies. If only there would not be all those idiots who intend to kill her, capture her, or simply use her. And those flaws in the game! Wait, what? Those pesky game characters now appear in the real world? And they can do magic? How did this happen? Adding to her troubles, her crush does not even look at her. As Dolores tries only to survive and hide between 'normal' people, she encounters stranger and stranger things that force her hand and, in the end, she has the answers to a lot of questions. It is a slow-developing story. I had a lot of fun writing it and hope to share it with you, dear reader if you also enjoy it. On the other hand, putting it in an acceptable form requires much work and energy. I intend to bring it to its end and not let it unfinished. I hate it when I encounter unfinished stories, so I understand the feeling. This is not a classical isekai story. There is travel between the two worlds, and the game world seems to be so very real... well, this is one plot of the story. This is not an MMORP game story. Part of the action happens inside a game world, but it is treated as a real world. Updates on a weekly basis, at least Monday and Friday, with additional bonus chapters as time and energy allow. Cover art: White Flower as A Dark Fairy by Darkrealmsmaiden Yolanda gracefully allowed me to use her dark fairy as cover. There are many more beautiful works of art to be discovered at her site: https://www.deviantart.com/darkrealmsmaiden Additional Grammar Trigger Warning: As a non-native speaker, I do my best. Unfortunately, this is not enough for people with a low tolerance for warped sentences and... they may want to skip the story :( Well, you have been warned :) I appreciate it when a reader points out a sentence that needs rework. That may spare a follow-up reader some pain and helps me understand where my English grammar problems are. * We thought we made the best game in Earth's history We thought we made the best interfaces ever seen We thought we made it - lifelike But it far exceeded our expectations. Dolores, I hope you're happy now. I hope you're alive now...
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Ravenge
Betty Morris made quite a few mistakes in her life but nothing compares to driving while drunk and on pain medication. The accident she caused put her in jeopardy of losing those close to her but most importantly, she's lost her one true love, music.
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Life is hard for the little Uzumaki. Abused, tortured, and treated like a monster. Naruto constantly walks the streets alone while receiving glares from the villagers and the constant verbal abuse. One day, on his birthday, he meets the nine tailed fox. Instead of hating him, the fox grew to like the little Uzumaki. The nine tails decides to train the little guy and make him into a strong shinobi. Very soon, the 3rd Hokage will call him into his office to reveal the new life of the little child...I, unfortunately, don't own Naruto. Masashi Kishimoto does.
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A Darker Ending
What if everything was different?DISCONTINUED.
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