《Hidden Adversary》Chapter 2 (Reworked)
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“A new life a new journey” Chapter 2
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+-Hinari,Imouto,Hitari and Takoshi-+
{After Prologue Chapter 3}
Side Narrative
Takoshi arrived at his apartment and knocked on the door waiting for it to open minutes later Hinari opened the door for him and shouted.
[with a worried anger face] “WHY ARE YOU LATE?! Aren’t you training until 3pm? Look at the time now it is 5pm!” Takoshi brushed his sweat off his face, “Sorry things got complicated back at the temple but today is my last day of training after this I will get to spend more time with you both”
“Good then I won’t have to wait for you all the time”
“You waited for me every day until I came back?” as I looked into her worried face she calmly told me “Don’t be surprised I always waited for you, now go get a bath I prepared for you and eat dinner! Before I throw it away”
“Alright please don’t throw the food, see ya in a bit”
Takoshi showered peacefully in the hot bath while gazing outside the window looking at the bright lights below in the city and the luminous sky outside the window Takoshi went out of the bath drying his body with a towel and walked into his room as he opened my door Takoshi saw Imouto lying in his bed playing her games.
“Umm Imouto? Why are you in my room, I thought it was locked when I went out training”
[Embarrased] “Hm! I was-uhhh” Imouto was too embarrassed to even told him why and Imouto always play one game on her smartphone while there are tons of apps and games on her smartphone, *MiniCraft* a game where all players build creatively using blocks. Imouto also have that Cruper(one of the creatures in the game) hoodie she always wearing and small shorts.
“Will you ever be wearing long pants? It’s cold and you might catch a fever” Imouto again focuses back on her game “no I like it this way”
“But please wear it in your room and play your games in your room why always my room?”
Imouto took Takoshi’s pillow and hugged it around her “The air in here is warm and cozy” While she hugged his pillow and rolled around in Takoshi’s bed. Takoshi opened the door of his bedroom “Please get out…. I want to wear my clothes”
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“Just wear your clothes I’m not going to bother you” Imouto said while laying on her back
“Please or I will carry you to your bedroom”
Imouto finally got up from the bed “Okay okay don’t take too long wearing clothes kay or else dinner will get cold”
Imouto went out of the bedroom while playing the game in her smartphone Takoshi close the door and wore his clothes and went downstairs to eat dinner seeing the three sisters waiting for him as he sat down at a chair Takoshi noticed Hinari and Imouto both sat beside him while both of their arms are under the table.
Takoshi talked over to Hinari and Imouto“Umm Hinari..”
“Yes?”
“Imouto?”
“Yeah?” both of their face are really red, they were trying to tell Takoshi something.
“Why are you two sitting beside me?” Both are silent for a moment until Hitari spoke to him with her hands under her chin.
“Maybe because tomorrow is the day you will get into high school with them on your first day of high school remember? Both of them are gonna be in the same class with you? “He didn’t forget about that and it really have been 5 years, time sure flies fast in the blink of an eye and Takoshi is in the same class as both of them.
Takoshi lay back on his chair and stare at the ceiling “Really? Wow it really has been 5 years I lived here since I was 10 but I want to talk to you two about something”
Hinari asked “What is it?”
“I haven’t properly introduced myself when I got here on the first day remember?” 5 years ago when Takoshi was 10 years old, he had suddenly ran off to his room and left both of them confused and worried at the living room which have been bothered him until now.
“Yeah we remember Takoshi, you ran off to your bedroom when we asked” Imouto said while holding her smartphone,
“I am sorry for that time Imouto now today I will tell you guys about it”
“Go ahead then Takoshi no need to be shy we all be listening” All of them have quiet down and started to hear Takoshi’s story.
Takoshi was blushed and shy to told them” Well okay then, [cough] My name is Takoshi Takeo Konou but before I have that name my name is Tithi Rosna I- “Imouto threw a spoon at Takoshi for no reason and it hit his head,
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“Umm brother? That name might have offended some people” after Imouto said that she covered her head with a hoodie,
“What people? Ohhh you meant at the Rea- “Hinari and Hitari threw their spoons at him again for no reasons! Takoshi glanced at them and read a sign they were holding,
[giving a white sign] *Don’t you ever break the wall*
Takoshi confused then suddenly knew the situation afterwards *What wall?......Now I get it*” Okay move on …. This is where the part I might ran off to my room” Before Takoshi continuing with his story, Imouto chained the dining room door and sat down” Move on with the story big brother…”
Side Takoshi
What is with this atmosphere? It felt like someone is going to kill me and eat me. *Yeah I might not think of getting out*” Okay I have an old family before I came here my whole family had passed away by a murder, since after the funeral big sis Hitari brought me here to stay with you guys” I looked around the dining room both Hinari and Imouto seemed depressed about it.
“I am sorry about your family brother but why didn’t you told us back then?” Hinari told Takoshi
“It’s okay Hinari it is because…. i am not ready” Takoshi looked over to his left and his face was all blank The atmosphere in this room had all of them being silence until Hitari talked about our school to set off this atmosphere we are now in,
“Hey Imouto Hinari tomorrow is Takoshi’s first day of high school right?” Both of them got lighten up Imouto and Hinari got really excited about it.
Imouto jumped “Yeah! I can’t wait to walk to school with you Big Brother”
“Don’t wake up late tomorrow okay?” Hinari said while pointing a fork at Takoshi
Takoshi held up both of his hands at Hinari “Okay I will Hinari and Imouto I will try not to stay up late or even wake up late, I have been looking forward to this day”
[Both Imouto and Hinari] “Don’t you dare forget that” Just like that we began to speak again thanks to Hitari, we finished eating our dinner and prepared our school stuff together, one by one finished packing their stuff and went to their bedroom until I am the last one to finished. Hitari was still up and called me to talk outside the balcony.
Hitari leaned over at the balcony with her arms and stared at the beautiful night sky “Hey Takoshi, your looking forward for tomorrow right?”
Takoshi then followed“Yeah Hitari, I have been since I lived here 5 years ago”
“Is that so?” Hitari glanced at me
“Yea, Time went by really fast as we blink right big sis?”
“I was wondering what would have happened if I didn’t take you in” I expressed my feeling to Hitari “I don’t know maybe no life, no happiness and only darkness I would felt really alone”
Hitari then looked over at me“is that how you would really felt?”
“Thank you for everything sis…Hitari I really mean it, if you didn’t come by and take care of me I might…” Hitari suddenly hugged me and comfort me while leaned beside her, if she really didn’t take care of me what would have really happen to me now?
“There is another reason for me to called you here”
” What is it?” I looked over at Hitari as she was taking out a piece of paper and gave it to me,
“I went through a lot of trouble and time to get this but would you fill this application? “
“What application form is this?” I was confused at the paper and started to read the title of it ‘Adoption Form’
Hitari suddenly spoke to me and I started to pay attention to her
“It’s an adoption application form, if you fill it out you will be officially being part of our family” Lost in words I looked in the form and checked at the name field it had already written out *Takoshi Kouno* Takoshi smiled and thanked Hitari for everything she gone through, I filled out the application and gave it to Hitari. I am officially from this day onwards their brother.
“I can’t wait to meet new friends in my first day of school ahaha”
“Don’t hurt yourself tomorrow”
“I won’t” I went to my room and sleep in my bed thinking if I can make friends tomorrow, I sure hope I will.
(End of Chp.2)
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